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Something lost,
the marred pearl,
slipped through my fingers for the imperfection,
falls into the pool there at my feet.
I watch the small waves ripple out
and know the sea will wash it far from me.

It was not perfect, when I held
it in my hand.
Far from it.

It was rough against my skin
and this, my pearl now,
smooth.

And yet I look out at the waves
and wonder how my pearl will fare,
delicate and already flawed,
rolled by the tides along the rougher rocks.
I'm not expressing myself too well lately. :) This is about someone I've known a good many years whose path did not seem to be going very nice places as of late. I think it may yet, though.
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hummuss Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2005
very nice poem. i enjoyed reading this very much :)
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2005   Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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LoriD55 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005
I like this very much, your description made me understand your words in the poem. Most times, I wonder what the person is writing about or what it means but I totally understood this, so :clap: for that and I like how you wrote it too, very symbolic.
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005   Writer
Thank you. :)

I'm glad of that. :) Poetry ought to be understood, in my view.
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LoriD55 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005
Especially to someone who isn't a poet ;)
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2005   Writer
I definitely think poetry nowadays tends to be stuff only poets read. A lot of people blame it on the general populous for not reading it, but I think a good deal of the problem is with what people write. If writing isn't accessible for the general populous, they probably won't read it.

Writing poetry in such a manner that people have to discuss for hours to ascertain its meaning seems contrary to the point of writing, to me. The point of writing, of art, really, in my mind, is to communicate something. If you don’t do that effectively, you haven’t achieved what you set out to do. (No matter how intellectual you think it sounds. :) )
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LoriD55 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2005
I agree, I like to understand what I'm reading and not taking guesses on what the poet is saying. Thank you for explaining the ways of poets and their art :)
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2005   Writer
You're quite welcome. :)

I'm afraid I can be a a bit opinionated, sometimes. :)
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LoriD55 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2005
I'm quite opinionated myself, so no worries :hug:
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2005   Writer
That's good. I find opinions interesting. :)
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LoriD55 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005
I agree, it makes it more worth reading!
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SilDag Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2005
i arrive like a fly by night
lover
for i wish to discover
new
new friends
new friendships
new dew before soaked
in the layers of clay
as such layed
before my own rest
returns to dust

thank you for your pearl
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2005   Writer
:)
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EndlessIllusions Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2005   Photographer
What a very sweet and very simple poem with a wonderful metaphor. Well done and simply beautiful, thank you for sharing.
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2005   Writer
Thank you. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I'm sort of unsure about my writing right now. I have all sorts of things going on in my mind, lately. I think it is best if you can clear your mind before you write, and I'm not being very good at that. :)
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EndlessIllusions Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2005   Photographer
I know what you mean, I haven't written a complete poem since feb... it worries me...
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annaa Featured By Owner May 24, 2005
A more beautiful heart than this is rarer than any pearl....
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 25, 2005   Writer
Thank you. That's a very sweet thing to say. :)
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lushlife Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
poets writing poems
how very nice
poets writing poems
now I have said it twice



it is good
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
Glad you approve. :)
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salience Featured By Owner May 11, 2005
That's a very pleasant conceit for the situation. I dig it. :thumbsup:
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
Thank you kindly.
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Meretrix-Simiorum Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
Very poignant. I particularly like the last stanza.
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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pearwood Featured By Owner May 11, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
It's hard to let go. Or, perhaps, it's hard to let go of the illusion that we can control the destiny of another who is determined to go her own way, as painful as it may be for her and for me.
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
I believe he's been in a lot of people's prayers, not just my own, and he's being looked after by someone much more capable than me. :)
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specialmorder Featured By Owner May 11, 2005
GOOD WORDS
GOOD JOB
good luck
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lilymaid7 Featured By Owner May 11, 2005   Writer
Glad you liked it. :) Things seem to have taken some turns for the better, and I'm glad of it. :)
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specialmorder Featured By Owner May 11, 2005
be happy as u can
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